检查后的更正部分

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【修改各个句子的理由】

例句 1

原文: Table I compares [the] [variegated data between] before and after IL-28 was [administrated] [by intravenous [drip] infusion to the rats].

检查后: Table I compares various parameters measured before and after IL-28 was administered to the rats by intravenous infusion.

▼ 修改理由

原文使用了"variegated"这个单字而不是"various"。"variegated"的其中一个意思是表示多样性，通常用于描述有斑点的植物（双色叶植物）。因此，在本句中使用various会比较合适。此外，原文还用了"administrated"这个单字，而不是"administered"，由于一般不使用前者，所以修改为administered。

根据上述意见修改句子如下:
“Table I compares various data between before and after IL-28 was administered by intravenous drip infusion to the rats.”

为了将本句修改为符合医学英语要求的正确表达方式，还有必要更正其他部分。
我订正了几个错误如下，以便将句子改的自然简洁。
首先，“compares...between before and after”的句法不太适合用于论文写作，因此我进行了更正。其次，“intravenous drip infusion”应改成“intravenous infusion”或“drip infusion”，前者较为合适，因此采用前者，而且我还颠倒了句末的词序，让句子变得更为通顺流畅。

例句 2

原文: After the [treatment] [[with] 20 mg / min for one hour of [IL-18]] there was a considerable increase of [fasting plasma sugar (FPS)], [immune reactive insulin] (IRI) did not show a statistically significant change[, however].

检查后: After infusion of IL-28 at 20 mg ? / min for one hour, there was a considerable increase of fasting plasma glucose (FPG), but immunoreactive insulin (IRI) did not show a statistically significant change.

▼ 修改理由

原文中的两个句子因逗号的标注位置错误而连成了一个句子。

根据上述意见修改句子如下:
“After treatment with 20 mg /min of IL-18 for one hour, there was a considerable increase of fasting plasma sugar (FPS). However, immune reactive insulin (IRI) did not show a statistically significant change.”

不过，光是将此句分成小句仍无法达到医学英语要求的正确水平。首先，我将语意不明且语法错误的"treatment with IL-28"更正为"infusion of IL-28"，如此一来本句的意义就更为明确，而且语法也正确。
其次，白细胞介素（IL)的单位"μg”或"ng”表示在非常低的浓度下具有活性，我认为这应该是注射速度的笔误，在与作者确认后，我将单位改为"mg”。
此外，“Fasting plasma sugar”和"immune reactive insulin”是错误的表达方式，我将这两个术语分别改为"fasting plasma glucose"和"immunoreactive insulin"，并删除了"however"，再将两个句子连起来，使它变为通顺、完整的一个句子。

例句 3

原文: Moreover, as seen in Figure 1, a [profound decline] was noted in the blood level of C-peptide after [30 mins], but this same change at [60-min] was not [also] detected.

检查后: Moreover , as seen in Figure 1, a marked decrease was noted in the blood level of C-peptide after 30 min, but this change was not detected after 60 min.

▼ 修改理由

原文最后部分的语法错误，因此我还修改了词序。

根据上述意见修改句子如下:
“Moreover, as seen in Figure 1, a profound decline was noted in the blood level of C-peptide after 30 mins, but this same change was not detected at 60-min.”

尽管我作了上述的修改，整个句子仍达不到医学英语要求的正确水平，于是我又订正了其它几个部分。首先，我将"profound decline”更正为"marked decrease"。两者的意思相同，不过，在撰写医学或科学论文时，使用后者较为合适。其次，我将"30 mins”和"60-min”这两个表示时间的单位写法统一为"30 min”和"60 min"。最后，我删掉了"this same change”中"same”这个赘词。(注释：如果是写成the same change则没有问题。)

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